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Post by realghostbuster on Jan 17, 2007 15:15:48 GMT -5
Hi, i am new to the site as you can see and I was hoping for some help. I am working on my portfolio and i was recomended by a certain comic artist to challenge myself and draw three pages from a comic i am not neccessarily too familiar with. so he chose the avengers for me and i am here to ask that if a few members here could post three-5 pages from any avengers comic from any era for me. i just need the page breaks, line and key actions to get me started. i will post the pages once they are done. i will post a link to my site also if any one wants to see that, i just dont want this to look like a spam post. thanks alot!
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Post by Van Plexico on Jan 17, 2007 15:23:31 GMT -5
Hi, Ghost-- welcome aboard. I have no problem with your request being here. I'm assuming you mean you would like someone to type up a script version of some pages from an Avengers comic for you to draw from, right? BTW, this got me to thinking-- I would love for any artists who belong to this board to submit a drawing of one or more of the Sentinels characters, for consideration to be included in the hardcover book, coming out later this year. It will have a section of sketches from various artists, famous and not-yet-famous. If you're interested, email or message me. For more info on the SENTINELS, go to: www.whiterocketbooks.comThanks! |
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Post by realghostbuster on Jan 17, 2007 15:23:47 GMT -5
oh and i know i could just buy a comic and do it that way but i was told not to look at the art so i dont get any preconceived notions of what it has looked like.
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Post by realghostbuster on Jan 17, 2007 15:25:43 GMT -5
thanks van plexico, yes im looking for someone to type up some pages from any avengers comic, new or classic. so anyone who is into doing that for me, i would love that. ill leave more details about the story behind this and which artist told me to do this once i see some scripts. btw my site is realghostbuster.deviantart.com, some stuff there. thanks |
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Post by The Night Phantom on Jan 17, 2007 19:29:48 GMT -5
Is a “noob” a newbie? Here is the beginning of Kurt Busiek’s script for Avengers vol. 3 #49, printed in that issue (I apologize for any typos):
[Note: This is our silent issue, so clarity and visual storytelling will be paramount — we need to make everything clear just from the art, but we don’t want to sacrifice drama and emotion to do it. Accordingly, I’m plotting this panel by panel, with a couple of thoughts in mind: First, I’m largely sticking to six panel pages, except when a big action or emotion moment occurs — to give the story a sense of orderly flow that can be interrupted when something big happens. If it’s all four panel pages, nothing will stand out as “louder” than the rest, but if we have a sense that things are orderly and contained and kinda hemmed in, then when they open up, it’ll seem that much bigger by contrast. Also, I’m envisioning the story as largely vertical or horizontal panels—again, to keep that sense that things are boxed in and narrow. That way, we can open up into square (or squarish) panels for the action stuff, and it’ll feel like there’s more room, more impact. I’m even going to code the panels, either [H], [V] or (for horizontal, vertical or square), as I did with Marvels. Not that you have to follow any of this, of course — I’m just getting down on paper how I see it, so you can follow it or reinterpret it as you feel best. As long as the story reads well and looks good, that’s the important part.]
Okay, onward…
ONE
Tom — will we have the “And there came a day/Stan Lee Presents” legend in this issue? If so, it should go here. Then…
Open with a small establishing shot of AVENGERS MANSION, running across the top of the page. [H]
Cut inside, to the Avengers Situation Room, introduced in #38 and seen in #40 as well. We’re specifically looking at a narrow slice of the status globe, showing the hologram-heads of CAPTAIN AMERICA, the SCARLET WITCH, the JACK OF HEARTS and PHOTON clustered together, with the card underneath indicating that they’re off-Earth and that contact has been lost. [V]
Another slice of the globe, with holo-heads of THOR, FIREBIRD, SHE-HULK and HERCULES, with a line connecting them to France and a card indicating that they’re supporting military action there. [V]
A somewhat wider shot. Looking past the globe at the WASP from behind; she’s seated in a chair at a control board, in front of a couple of video screens, one showing WONDER MAN (powered up) and the other showing the GENERAL from #45. [If we see any of the holo-heads from the globe display in the foreground, let’s see WONDER MAN, to show he’s in California.] Anyway, the WASP was facing those screens, but she’s turning sharply, her attention caught by something — [V]
— and we see what she’s looking at: A wide radar-screen-like display, showing a cloud of blips, one larger than the others. (This is Kang and the Sentinels heading for Washington, but they’re just radar-blips here). Maybe there’s a flashing red “danger” light next to the screen. [H]
On the WASP’s face, looking uneasy and worried.
[indicia at page bottom]
TWO
Cut to a long shot of a French landscape, with smoke rising from a destroyed village somewhere. It’s evening. [H]
Zoom in on an army camp, flying both the French flag and the UN flag. [H]
Larger shot. From behind and to the side, we see THOR and FIREBIRD, a little beat up and grimy from all the fighting they’ve been doing, are walking through the camp. Exhausted SOLDIERS are slumped, relaxing, on the ground, WOUNDED MEN are carried by on stretchers, and there’s mud and grime everywhere. This is not a happy Army camp — these people are exhausted from fighting valiantly but being pushed back, unable to stop the enemy advance. [H]
On THOR, taking this all in. His face looks weary, haggard, consumed with all the death he’s been seeing.
On FIREBIRD, looking up at him, worried that he’ll quit the Avengers after all this, as he said he was planning to. [V]
THREE
FIREBIRD reacts, as her wrist-communicator within her glove starts beeping. [V]
She activates it, and that circular holo-screen activates, showing us the WASP’s grave face. [V]
Closer on the WASP, grave, as she explains what’s going on. [V]
On THOR and FIREBIRD, taking it in, concerned. [H]
Pull back to see THOR spinning his hammer, the circle of the spin glowing as it forms a portal in the air.
The portal hanging in mid-air, fully-formed. [V]
THOR and FIREBIRD step through, their destination unknown as yet. [V]
FOUR
Cut to a long shot of WASHINGTON DC, with that defensive ring-wall around it. [H]
We see specks in the sky, much like what the Wasp saw on her screen, but this is for real. [H]
The specks get closer, and we can see that the large one leading them is a humanoid shape. FIGHTER PLANES are approaching from the foreground. [H]
And a largish panel, from the p.o.v. of a FIGHTER PILOT, close enough to see that it’s the gigantic KANG-image, leading the flight of SENTINELS, from last issue, walking downward through the air.
On KANG, looking lordly and grim. As he points toward the city, obviously giving a command. [V]
[Note: If I haven’t mentioned it yet, we’re playing Kang in this story as a very capable, confident, relaxed commander — an old campaigner, a general who knows exactly what he’s doing, and who doesn’t need to raise his voice. As such, he won’t rant and rave like a classic Marvel villain, but instead be very cool and contained and military, an aristocratic general, not a raving loon.]
FIVE
The SENTINELS soar to the attack, diving and blasting at the city, blasting fighter planes, etc. [H]
But the blasts aimed at the city burst against a bubble-like force-field the defense wall has projected around the city. It’s invisible, so it’s only defined by the splash of the blasts. [H]
Plodex-tech armaments at the tops of the defense-walls’ towers swivel to lock onto the Sentinels — [V]
— and they blast, blowing at least one SENTINEL to bits, and damaging others. In the background, we can see more PLANES getting destroyed, and a couple of parachutes here and there, indicating that some pilots are living through this.
On KANG, cocking an eyebrow, intrigued, musing. [V]
SIX
KANG cocks his head upward, calling something to the sky. [long V]
And high up in orbit, we see Damocles Base, its “blade” pointed toward the Earth. [V]
Inside the base somewhere, we see some of KANG’S MEN, in a control-room/fire-control-room chamber, very hi-tech. They’re manipulating controls, working at displays and arrays and such, like a futuristic version of a NASA control room. The SCARLET CENTURION stands impassively at the back of the room, his helmet off, his arms crossed, watching the activity. [V]
KANG points down toward Washington, very solemn, like Caesar deciding on an execution. [V]
Big panel. Damocles Base fires a blast — [V]
[Note: The men in the fire-control room aren’t the armored soldiers we saw invading France, but technicians. Still in futuristic outfits, but not battle-armor.]
SEVEN
— and the blast blows the crap out of a large section of the defense-wall, blowing it up spectacularly, in a big panel. [long V]
KANG looks pleased. [V]
The base fires again. [V]
We see two or three more sections of the wall being destroyed. [H]
KANG looks satisfied, a “That takes care of that” look on his face. [H]
EIGHT
KANG strides forward, the SENTINELS behind him, stepping into Washington’s airspace. PLANES seen in the distance behind them, arcing around for another attack. [V]
A vertical, disc-shaped portal opens in mid-air (we see it from the side, mostly) — [V]
— and THOR, FIREBIRD, and the WASP come through. [V]
Looking past them (in mid-air) at the giant KANG, looking at them as if they’re fleas, come to annoy him. [H]
They charge, attacking. [H]
NINE
Cut to the White House. [H]
The PRESIDENT stands in the Oval Office, looking out the window at flashes of energy in the sky — all he can see of the combat going on. He’s got his hands behind his back — I figure he’d be frustrated that all he can do is observe, but his manner would be very contained. [V]
FOUR or FIVE SECRET SERVICE AGENTS come in, one of them doing that hand-to-the-ear-talking-to-someone-via-radio thing. [V]
They surround the PRESIDENT, so there’s no way at him but through them — [V]
— and hustle him out of the room. [H]
Through the Oval Office window, we see, out on the White House lawn, a helicopter with the Presidential Seal on it, its PILOTS on board, armed SECRET SERVICE AGENTS around it, their guns out, coats blowing from the rotors. This’ll be where the President’s headed, to evac him from the city. [H]
TEN
We see a general melee panel, as the AVENGERS and the FIGHTER PLANES mix it up with the SENTINELS. [H]
We see THOR smash through a SENTINEL, borne along by his hammer.
We see FIREBIRD melting a SENTINEL’s face with an intense blast of holy fire that splashes around its head.
We see both of them flying off to attack more SENTINELS. [H]
Below, we see that the highways out of the city are jammed with cars, as people try to get out of the city. DRIVERS are waving their fists, shouting, PASSENGERS are weeping, PEDESTRIANS are running by, or climbing over the cars — these people want to get anywhere but here… [H]
ELEVEN
We see the WASP soaring toward a SENTINEL’s head. [H]
She flies inside its mouth — [V]
— and inside, rips up wires and blasts circuit-boards to smithereens with her Wasp’s sting — [V]
— and then flies out as its head explodes. [V]
Below, we see cars jammed up against the inner surface of the defense walls, PEOPLE climbing on them, trying to get some purchase on the walls, so they can climb up and over. Frantic, panicked activity (someone pounding their fists vainly on the wall?), but it should be pretty clear that they’re not going to be getting out. [H]
For what it’s worth, penciler Kieron Dwyer did take Busiek up on his offer in the preamble, staying free from the exact letter of the script. —NP |
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Post by realghostbuster on Jan 17, 2007 21:05:11 GMT -5
thanks night phantom, karma for you. can anyone post one with dialogue tho, i was told to have dialogue in it as well (altho this is very good).
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Post by The Night Phantom on Jan 17, 2007 21:30:29 GMT -5
You’re welcome, noob. As for dialogue, how about we just enhance the scripting I posted? I hesitate to pretend to write Busiek-style, but maybe it’s OK if we write in another style, say, Bendis’:
THREE FIREBIRD reacts, as her wrist-communicator within her glove starts beeping. [V] She activates it, and that circular holo-screen activates, showing us the WASP’s grave face. FIREBIRD: “Hello?” WASP: “Is Thor there?” FIREBIRD: “Is who there?” WASP: “Thor.” FIREBIRD: “No, this is Firebird.” [V] Closer on the WASP, grave, as she explains what’s going on. WASP: “No, I mean, is Thor with you?” FIREBIRD (possibly off panel): “ You called me.” WASP: “What?” FIREBIRD: “You called me. Thor has a communicator. If you wanted to talk to him, you could have called him.” WASP: “No, I—” FIREBIRD: “I’m not his receptionist.” WASP: “Did I say you’re his receptionist? I want to talk to both of you.” [V] On THOR and FIREBIRD, taking it in, concerned. FIREBIRD: “Oy, I feel like a schlemiel.” WASP: “Thor?” THOR: “Yes?” WASP: “Are you there?” THOR: “Yes.” WASP: “Thor, listen.” THOR: “Don’t I always?” WASP: “What?” THOR: “Listen.” WASP: “No, you listen.” THOR: “No, I mean, don’t I always listen?” WASP: “Firebird?” FIREBIRD: “Yes?” WASP: “Just checking. Thor, I want you to teleport yourself and Firebird over here.” [H] Pull back to see THOR spinning his hammer, the circle of the spin glowing as it forms a portal in the air. FIREBIRD: “That was it? She couldn’t have called you?”
The portal hanging in mid-air, fully-formed. [V]
THOR and FIREBIRD step through, their destination unknown as yet. THOR: “What is a schlemiel?” [V] |
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